My First Poem (14 Years Old)…how Is It?
Question by Johnny L.: My First Poem (14 years old)…how is it?
I’m 14 and this is my first real try at poetry…any comments, criticisms or suggestions?
Depression?
“‘Tis as plankton to a whale”
Said the fox…
That ferocious entity
Who kindly steals ungainly emotions
Leaving apathy alone, in that swirling abyss of my mind
How peaceful, How serene
Like a drug, a clever sheen
So jump foxxy
Into your den
Take me away foxxy
To that Land again.
Best answer:
Answer by gretch
is this supposed to be about someone trying to be happy, but are lost in depression, if it is, it makes seance, if not, i haven’t a clue what your talking about.
best of luck. keep writing, you talent will develop. i started a year ago and i have improved leaps and bounds!
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